I guess the only advice I have is not to break up your paragraphs so much. I know it makes for easier reading on the web, but an average of 5-6 lines a paragragh is still short enough to read easily, and is a ton less choppy. And the pictures break it up nicely anyway.
Also use dates (or at least "fall of 99" or whatever) when you are doing a chronological piece like that. It makes it a lot easier to keep track of.
Farooq is the man so hit your knees and start praying!