I guess the only advice I have is not to break up your paragraphs so much. I know it makes for easier reading on the web, but an average of 5-6 lines a paragragh is still short enough to read easily, and is a ton less choppy. And the pictures break it up nicely anyway.
Also use dates (or at least "fall of 99" or whatever) when you are doing a chronological piece like that. It makes it a lot easier to keep track of.
Farooq is the man so hit your knees and start praying!
Hmm..did you happen to have read Hulk Hogan's book? He says those sort of things...sounds like the usual HH hyperbole. About the guy dying..oh shit? that was for real? I figured it was an urban myth ;)